2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之八：如何扩展句子

2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之八：如何扩展句子

‎2020届二轮复习书面表达写作技巧之八：如何扩展句子 高考英语书面表达不仅规定了写作内容，还明确规定了词数，并在评分标准中指出，如果“词数少于80和多于120的，从总分中减去2分”。但在实际阅卷过程中，如果词数过少，扣掉的不止是2分。因为篇幅过短，不能吸引阅卷老师细看以便查找诸如“高级词汇”“较高级结构”等“加分点”，自然影响得分档次。‎ 在试题“注意”中有明确规定：“1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯”。这里既规定了词数，又指定了充实文章的方法，即“适当增加细节”。“适当增加细节”其中很重要的一个方法就是——追加成分。‎ 目的 扩展句子，充实文章 方法 在要点句基础上适当增加合乎逻辑的附加成分，如定语(从句)、状语(从句)(如目的、条件、原因、结果、方式等)、非谓语结构、独立主格结构、举例等，使表达更丰满，内容更充实，主题更突出 特色 结构多变，句式多样 ‎[典例观摩悟法]‎ ‎1．(提醒演讲参赛选手)要守时、讲卫生、守纪律。‎ Please arrive on time, keep quiet and don't litter around.‎ ‎→Please arrive there on time, for whoever is late won't be allowed to enter. It's bad manners to litter around.And always ‎ keep quiet while waiting for your turn.‎ ‎[分析]　原句虽然没有直译所给要点，且灵活化解了难点，但过于直白、语气较为生硬；而改写后的句子则进行了拓展，具体明确。如“for whoever is late ...”提醒参赛选手迟到后果的严重性；“It's bad manners ...”使用it作形式主语的句型，指出乱扔东西属于不礼貌行为；“while waiting for your turn”使用状语从句的省略形式，进行补充说明。因此，改写后的句子更充实，更适宜对参赛选手提建议的语境。‎ ‎2．(演讲注意事项)要面带微笑；要讲慢些，讲清楚。‎ Be sure to wear a smile on your face.Besides, remember to speak slowly and clearly.‎ ‎→Be sure to wear a smile on your face when you speak, which will make you relaxed.Besides, remember to speak slowly and clearly so that you can leave a good impression on the audience and judges.‎ ‎[分析]　加彩部分是根据语境所追加的成分，如“which will make you relaxed”指出“演讲时微笑”的好处；“so that you can ...”为“讲慢些，讲清楚”的目的，留下好印象是“演讲”效果之一，也是能否获得评委青睐的因素之一。适当增加与所给信息相关的时间、原因、结果、条件、目的等成分来表达细节内容，能够使习作流畅、丰满，达到应有的表达效果。‎ ‎[专题过关训练]‎ 请发挥合理想象，扩展句子(请注意括号内提供的语境)‎ ‎1．(开设英语电影欣赏课)建议多选择英语电影。‎ As_a_young_student,_I suggest the teacher choose more English films that appeal_to_us_teenagers,_thus making_English_learning_more_interesting.‎ ‎2．(讨论学生带手机问题)不允许学生带手机。‎ Students are forbidden to take a cellphone in_order_not_to_affect_our_studies/so_as_not_to_disturb_others_in_class.‎ ‎3．(去看电影)你最好早点到。‎ In_order_to_get_a_good_seat_for_seeing,_you'd better arrive a bit earlier.‎ ‎4．(2018•全国卷Ⅱ书面表达)(通知学校放映电影)这部英文短片主要与我们学校的发展有关。‎ The English short film is mainly related to the development of our school, which_will_greatly_help_us_students_know_the_school's_history_better_and_appeal_to_us_to_make_contributions_to_our_school's_development.‎ ‎5．(2018•全国卷Ⅲ书面表达)(介绍学校体育馆)体育场馆已经建立起来，许多运动项目可在里面举行。‎ To begin with, a new stadium has been built up，‎ which_has_become_the_new_landmark_in_our_school.Moreover, with the stadium set up, a wide range of sports events are able to be held, of_which_table_tennis,_football_as_well_as_running_competitions_enjoy_great_popularity.‎ ‎6．(2018•北京高考书面表达)(咨询来北京上大学)建议你上北京大学，中国文学专业适合你。‎ Learning_your_keen_interest_in_Chinese_culture,_I suggest you apply for Peking University, one_of_the_best_universities_in_China.Its Chinese Literature major is perfect for you where_you_can_be_completely_soaked_in_Chinese_profound_history_and_rich_culture.‎