高考英语满分作文及名师评析

高考英语满分作文及名师评析

新课标高考英语满分作文及名师评析 ‎【全国卷I海南、宁夏】‎ ‎　　【试题回放】假定你是李华，正在英国接受英语培训，住在一户英国人家里。今天你的房东Mrs. Wilson 不在家，你准备外出，请给Mrs. Wilson 写一留言条，内容包括：‎ ‎1．外出购物 ‎2．替房东还书 ‎3．Tracy 来电话留言：1）咖啡屋（Bolton Coffee）见面取消2）此事已告知Susan 3) 尽快回电 ‎　　注意：1. 词数100左右； 2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。‎ Mrs. Wilson, I’m going out shopping, and won’t be back until about 5:00 pm. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. At about 1 o’clock this afternoon, Tracy called, saying that she couldn’t meet you at Bolton Coffee tomorrow morning as she has something important to attend to. She felt very sorry about that, but said that you could set some other time for the meeting. She wanted you to call her back as soon as you are home. She has already told Susan about this ‎ change. Yours, Li Hua [名师点评] 本文属于提纲式要点作文，是学生比较熟悉的题材，体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活型的原则。行文人称、时态运用恰当、准确，各个要点间逻辑连贯，行文通顺。提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意简洁明了，开头要开门见山。‎ ‎【北京卷】‎ ‎　　【试题回放】情景作文　　假设你是红星中学高三一班的学生李华，为响应绿化祖国的号召，你班四月十二日去郊区植树，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍植树活动的全过程，给某英文杂志的“绿色行动”专栏写一篇以“Green Action in Our Class”为题的英文稿件。　　注意：词数不少于60 　　提示词：郊区 suburbs April 12 is memorable because our class had a meaningful experience on that day. In the morning, we bicycled to the suburbs to plant trees, talking and laughing all the way. Upon arrival, we began to work immediately. Some were digging holes. Some were carrying and planting young trees. Others were watering . After getting the work done, we put up a board reminding people to protect the trees. Before leaving we took some photos to record our green action. Seeing the lines of trees, we all had a sense of achievement. We feel it’s our duty to protect and beautify our environment.‎ ‎　　【名师点评】　　本文是设计巧妙的提纲要点式作文，与环保结合，立意较好。文章思路清晰，要点连贯，在语言的表达上选词新颖，同时运用了分词短语作状语等较好的句式表达。‎ ‎ ‎ ‎　　【北京卷】‎ ‎　　【试题回放】开放作文　　请根据下面提示，写一篇短文，词数不少于50‎ In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.‎ What an interesting picture! A western young man, sitting at a table, is ready to eat a bowl of noodles. He is holding two forks the same way as we Chinese hold chopsticks. He is trying so hard to pick up the noodles that he is sweating a lot. At first glance, I think it’s a bit funny, for we Chinese take for granted that chopsticks are the tools for eating noodles. The man in the picture is trying to copy us. Obviously he is doing it the ‎ hard way. Maybe using one fork will do a better job, In my opinion, we don’t need to copy others’ ways of thinking. Sometimes a simpler way of doing things may be a better way.‎ ‎　　【名师点评】　　本文是开放性作文，要求考生把握好图画内容，发散表达。考生重点要看出这个人是卷发高鼻的外国人，要体会到西式刀*对中式食物的矛盾性。行文结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。‎ ‎【江苏卷】　　【试题回放】鼠标是计算机时代最佳的人机交互工具之一。它极大地方便了人们的计算机操作。但是，过分依赖鼠标的习惯也会带来一些不利影响。请你以鼠标为切入点，根据下表所提示的信息，用英语写一篇短文。‎ ‎　　注意：1．对所给要点逐一陈述，适当发挥，不要简单翻译。2．词数150左右。开头已经写好，不计人总词数。3．作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。‎ The mouse is a most effective device used by people to communicate with a computer．‎ For most people, it’s almost impossible to operate a computer without a mouse, let alone surf the Internet. A well-chosen mouse is really handy,‎ ‎ flexible and convenient in controlling the screen. With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want. It can even bring us a flood of music, movies and PC games. Just imagine, all this can be done with a cute mouse.‎ A convenient tool can certainly make our work easier, but it doesn’t always help in a positive way. Too much ready information on our fingertips leaves little room for knowledge pursuing. Too many ready answers make us less excited in finding truth. Relying too much on mouse clicking makes us lazier and less creative both mentally and physically.‎ ‎　　【名师点评】本文为提纲式说明文体裁，所选内容与我们生活相关，考生只要把所给要点逐条陈述，适度发挥，不要逐条翻译即可。文章说理清楚，语言流畅，句式表达多样，用词恰当、准确。不失为一篇满分作文。‎