【英语】2018届二轮复习书面表达中亮点句式润色的七大原则教案（7页）

【英语】2018届二轮复习书面表达中亮点句式润色的七大原则教案（7页）

‎2018届 二轮复习 书面表达中亮点句式润色的七大原则 作文要想得高分，必须要有吸引阅卷老师眼球的亮点。如何打造亮点句式呢？大家可以遵循以下七个原则。‎ 原则一：新颖性 改掉句中的俗词，或合理调整句子语序，都有助于提升句子的新颖性。新颖的句子能为评卷者在评卷过程中带来良性体验，能有效提升作文表达和分值。‎ ‎1．变换用词 行文时，既要避免使用俗词，又要避开冷僻词汇。‎ ‎(1) I definitely believe that bad words really have bad influence on us, and that only with a good understanding of them can we get through and get along well.‎ ‎→I am definitely convinced that bad words really have bad influence on us, and that only with a good understanding of them can we get through and get along well.‎ ‎(2013·湖北高考满分作文)‎ ‎(2)Moreover, I will open more channels for you to speak out your opinions and need. ‎ ‎→Moreover, I will open more channels for you to voice your opinions and need.(2013·天津高考书面表达)‎ 另外，我会开发更多渠道，让你们说出观点和需求。‎ ‎(3)I believe very much that a wise choice leads to perfection. ‎ ‎→I am pretty convinced that a wise choice leads to ‎ perfection.(2013·上海高考满分作文)‎ 我非常相信，英明的选择会通向完美。‎ ‎2．变换语序 适当变换语序也有助于提高句子新颖性。在评卷过程中，倒装句、插入语等非正常语序形式都能让评卷人眼前一亮。‎ ‎(1)We can better ourselves in the future only by focusing more on correcting our mistakes.‎ ‎→Only by focusing more on correcting our mistakes can we better ourselves in the future.(2013·湖南高考满分作文)‎ 我们只有通过不断改正错误才能使我们自己在未来变得更好。‎ ‎(2)I guess you must have had no end of trouble.‎ ‎→You must have had no end of trouble, I guess.‎ 我想你一定经历过无数的困难。‎ ‎[即时演练]　用变换用词或语序的方式增加新颖性 ‎1．We should remember that hard work leads to success.‎ ‎→We should bear_in_mind that hard work leads to success.‎ ‎2．Recycled bags are better than plastic bags in environment protecting.‎ ‎→Recycled bags are_superior_to/have_advantages_over plastic bags in environment protecting.‎ ‎3．The days when we Chinese people were looked down upon are gone.‎ ‎→Gone_are_the_days when we Chinese people were looked down upon.‎ ‎4．A beautiful smile can not only make ourselves happy, but also enable others to be delighted.‎ ‎→Not_only_can_a_beautiful_smile_make ourselves happy, but also enable others to be delighted.‎ 原则二：具体性 在具备一定词汇量的条件下，具体的表达比泛泛而谈的内容更能引起读者的共鸣。换句话说，写作需要“真善美”，尽量避免“假大空”。‎ ‎1．My friend is fixing the car.‎ ‎→My friend, Leon, is fixing his 12yearold Santana.‎ ‎2．I saw my classmate studying in the classroom.‎ ‎→I saw my naughty but lovely classmate studying in the classroom.‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“具体性原则”把“假大空版”改为“真善美版”‎ 写作要求：学校要举行一场题为“Turning a bad mood into a good one”的英语作文比赛，要求你写一篇文章，其中一个要点是如何调整心情。‎ 假大空版：Keeping a good mood is of great importance. When you feel angry or anxious, calm down. It is useless losing a temper and we should always make ourselves happy.‎ 真善美版：We_should_learn_to_keep_a_good_mood._Communicating_with_family_members_or_friends_is_the_best_choice._Also_listening_to_some_peaceful_music_can_be_helpful._Reading_is_another_way_to_stop_being_mad.‎ 原则三：简洁性 写作过程中，不必为了增添字数而采用冗余表达。给评分者带来好感的不是字数，而是简洁明了、条理清晰的语句。‎ ‎1．His brother, who is a tourist guide, will help us plan this trip.‎ ‎→His brother, a tourist guide, will help us plan this trip.‎ ‎2．They found the answer to be quite satisfactory.‎ ‎→They found the answer quite satisfactory.‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“简洁性原则”简化下面的句子 ‎1．The friendship that is based on profits won’t last long.‎ The_friendship_based_on_profits_won’t_last_long.‎ ‎2．They consider Paris to be the brain and heart of the country.‎ They_consider_Paris_the_brain_and_heart_of_the_country.‎ 原则四：紧凑性 作文中难免用到短句，但如果短句太多，会使人感到段落过于零散。因此需要将过多的短句整合成紧凑的句子。‎ Most tourist attractions in China are littered. This lake is the worst.‎ ‎→Most tourist attractions in China are littered, the worst of which is this lake.‎ ‎→Most tourist attractions in China are littered, with this lake being the worst.‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“紧凑性原则”整合下面的句子 ‎1．He is our English teacher. His name is Wang Bin. He has taught us for two years.‎ Wang_Bin,_our_English_teacher,_has_taught_us_for_two_years.‎ ‎2．They finished repairing the broken chair together. They felt very happy. ‎ How_happy_they_felt_after_they_finished_repairing_the_broken_chair_together!‎ 原则五：逻辑性 汉语重语义，英语重逻辑。在写作中如果通过逻辑表达自己的观点、取舍、好恶等信息，这样的句子会博得评卷者的青睐。‎ ‎1．To put this problem to an end, we must follow these steps.‎ ‎→To put this problem to an end, we have no alternative but to follow these steps.‎ ‎2．The love of a man who lays down his life for his friends is the greatest love.‎ ‎→There is no greater love than that of a man who lays down his life for his friends.‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“逻辑性原则”改写下面的句子 ‎1．Mr. Stevenson is great to work for — he is really the best boss for me to ask for.‎ Mr._Stevenson_is_great_to_work_for_—_I_really_couldn’t_ask_for_a_better_boss.‎ ‎2．Being addicted to computer games can most affect the study of a student.‎ Nothing_can_affect_the_study_of_a_student_as_greatly_as_being_addicted_to_computer_games.‎ 原则六：互动性 写作是与读者互动的一个过程。在写作中，作者可以通过适当发问来引导读者对论题逐渐深入了解。‎ Which is more important, wealth or health?‎ 财富和健康，哪个更重要？‎ Which is better, a telephone call or a letter?‎ 打电话还是写信，哪个更好？‎ Should students make friends on line?‎ 学生应该网上交友吗？‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“互动性原则”改写下列句子 ‎1．We should take the following measures to solve the problem.‎ Any_solutions?_How_about_taking_the_following_measures?‎ ‎2．As to whether the private car drivers shall be charged congestion fees, opinions are divided.‎ Shall_the_private_car_drivers_be_charged_congestion_fees?_Opinions_are_divided_on_this_matter.‎ 原则七：优雅性 运用简单的修辞，可增加句子的优雅性。有些同学可能会感觉太难，但简单易行的修辞方法我们在阅读过程中随处可见，只是我们只顾做题，从未领会过文章中的生花妙笔。‎ In order to get her to recover as soon as possible, I took good care of her by helping her take some medicine, putting cold towel on her forehead, preparing her meals, etc.(2013·北京高考满分作文)‎ 为了让她尽快恢复，我细心照顾她，帮她服药、把冷毛巾放在她的额头上、为她做饭等。(排比)‎ One who teaches morality but practices immorality is a wolf in a sheep’s skin.‎ 满口仁义道德，一肚子男盗女娼的人就是披着羊皮的狼。(比喻)‎ ‎[即时演练]　用“优雅性原则”翻译下列句子 ‎1．要求这位秘书写报告时要快速、准确、全面。(排比)‎ The_secretary_was_asked_to_write_the_report_quickly,_accurately_and_throughly.‎ ‎2．老师说他是个差生，因为他要等到考试时才学习、做作业漫不经心、而且缺乏学习动力。(排比)‎ The_teacher_said_that_he_was_a_poor_student_because_he_waited_until_the_last_minute_to_study_for_the_exam,_completed_his_homework_in_a_careless_way,_and_lacked_motivation._‎ ‎3．世界就是个舞台，所有的男人和女人都是演员。(比喻)‎ The_whole_world_is_a_stage._All_men_and_women_are_merely_players._‎ ‎4．自我批评的重要性就如同空气和水一样。(比喻)‎ Selfcriticism_is_as_important_to_us_as_air_and_water.‎