海南卷-三年（2017—2019）中考英语满分作文解析

海南卷-三年（2017—2019）中考英语满分作文解析

作文 10 海南卷 2019 年 文段表达 据悉，我国青少年的近视率居全球第一，70%的学生有视力方面的问题．为引起广大青少年的重视， 某英语报刊正在开展以" Saving Our Eyesight"为题的征文活动．请根据以下提示写一篇短文投稿，分析造成 青少年近视的原因并提出保护视力的合理建议． 要求： 1．语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范． 2．所有提示须全部用上，并作适当发挥． 3．文中不得出现真实的人名、校名、地名． 4. 80 词左右（文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）． Saving Our Eyesight As the saying goes， "Eyes are the window to the soul（心灵 ） "However， 70% of us have poor eyesight． What has caused this problem？______________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ In a word， lets take care of our eyes so that we can see our bright future． 2019 年海南中考英语作文以“保护视力”为话题，话题贴近学生生活。现在学生视力下降已经成为一 个比较严重的问题，同时也受到了社会的关注，是一个常见的话题。学生在写作时可以联系自己的生活实 际，使学生可以有话可说，本话题难度较低。学生在写作时一定要注意表达逻辑清楚，思路清晰，注意语 言生动，多用有亮点的句型。 Saving Our Eyesight As the saying goes，"Eyes are the window to the soul（心灵 ） "However， 70% of us have poor eyesight． What has caused this problem？ The main reason is the bad habits of using eyes．For example， many of us read in wrong positions，such as reading in bed or keeping our eyes too close to the book．Besides，taking less exercise can also cause poor eyesight． What's more， some of us spend too much time playing computer games or watching TV．It's bad for our eyes． So how can we protect our eyes？Here is some advice on how to protect our eyes． First，we should be cautious on the health of using eyes．We should not keep our eyes working for a long time． While reading ，we should keep the book about a foot away from us．After reading for an hour or two， we had better have a rest by looking at the plants in the distance．Second，using less electronic products is a good way to protect our eyes． Besides，we should see green plants as often as possible．Finally， remember to do eye ﹣protecting exercises or do more outdoor sports， which will help us keep good eyesight． In a word，let's take care of our eyes so that we can see our bright future． 【名师点评】 2019 年海南中考英语作文，要求介绍保护视力的重要性和方法，文体为说明文；说明介绍类文章主要 用一般现在时；本文要求谈谈如何保护视力，所以主要使用第一人称; 词数不少于 70 词，开头和结尾已给 出，但不计入总词数，文中不得出现真实的人名、校名。 整体逻辑清晰,有条理; 让人读起来思路很清晰。 为提升作文的整体水平，应注意使用一些高级词汇、短语以及复合句、非谓语动词等复杂结构。同时语句 之间使用恰当的连接成分，使文意上下连贯，表达流畅。 【写作亮点】 这是一篇优秀的作文，学生能联系自己的实际生活，展开合理的论述。短文作者根据题目要求以保护 我们的视力为主题，采用一般现在时态，作文对学生视力下降的原因做了分析，“The main reason is the bad habits of using eyes．For example...k．Besides... What's more，...．”条理清楚，语言生动，第二段，给出了 具体的建议，语篇内容完整。文中多处使用连接词，高级词汇、句型。如【高分句型一】 Besides，we should see green plants as often as possible．【高分句型一】Finally， remember to do eye﹣protecting exercises or do more outdoor sports， which will help us keep good eyesight．结尾：表达愿望 呼吁大家保护好视力。 2018 年 2018 年 5 月 5 日上午，第十届海南省“书香节”启动仪式在海南省图书馆举行。为响应 “书香 节”活动，你校校刊英文版正在开展以“I Like Reading”为主题的征文活动。请根据下表提示内容写一篇 短文，介绍你对阅读的看法及个人的阅读情况。 要求： 1. 语句通顺，意思连贯，语法正确，书写规范； 2. 必须包含所给提示内容，并做适当发挥； 3. 行文中不得出现真实人名、校名或地名； 4. 不少于 80 词。（短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数） Reading makes a full man. It’s important and necessary for everyone to read. ___________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________ ____________________________________________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________ 2018 年海南中考英语作文与以往的作文形式相比大致相同，要求学生写出阅读的优点以及自己的阅读 习惯等内容，契合学生生活实际，体现了核心素养下的实践创新，具有时代特色。旨在培养学生的学习能 力以及充分、合理安排自己业余生活的能力。培养学生爱读书的良好习惯。学生在写作时，要注意把握文 章的体裁/人称和时态。 Reading makes a full man. It’s important and necessary for everyone to read. Reading can open up our minds and help us get more knowledge. As for me, I like reading a lot. In my spare time, I not only go to bookstores to buy books but also borrow books from the library. Before going to bed, I always spend some time reading. That really makes me feel relaxed. On weekends, I enjoy reading some novels. Journey to the West is my favorite book. And Monkey King is my super hero. The summer holiday is coming, I am going to read Harry Potter which is a very popular magic book. Reading is a lifelong journey. I hope everyone can read as much as possible in the future. 【名师点评】 2018 海南中考英语作文以“ I Like Reading ”为题目的夹叙夹议的命题作文，难度等级属于适中，是 常见的中考作文话题之一，用一般现在时叙述，人称为第一人称。要求介绍你对阅读的看法及平时的阅读 情况，有参考提示语，可适当发挥，学生在写作时要注意围绕全文主题安排文章结构，不能逐词翻译，语 言准确。 合理使用连词，使得文章逻辑清晰，尽量使用熟悉且有把握的单词和句式，保持卷面整洁。 【写作亮点】本文是一篇优秀的作文，围绕主题展开论述。本文开篇即点明观点，引出话题，阅读开阔思 维，丰富知识 Reading makes a full man . it ' s important and necessary for everyone to read . Reading can open up our minds and help us get more knowledge. 接下来写了自己的阅读状况和习惯包括阅读内容，Journey to the West 和 Harry Potter. 并适当运用了连词 As for me ，和 be going to 句型。结尾点明主题，表达自己的期望， 希望大家热爱读书 Reading is a lifelong journey. I hope everyone can read as much as possible in the future.。【高 分句型一】In my spare time, I not only go to bookstores to buy books but also borrow books from the library.【高 分句型二】The summer holiday is coming, I am going to read Harry Potter which is a very popular magic book. 2017 年 Liang Ling 梁玲同学是你校初三（1）班的学生。她家境贫寒，但她勇于面对困难、主动承担家 务且刻苦学习， 大家都很喜欢并敬佩她。作为学校英文报刊记者，你对她进行了采访。请根据下面的采访笔记写一篇关于 她的报道。 要求： 1. 语句通顺，意思连贯， 语法正确，书写规范； 2. 必须包含所给提示，并做适当发挥； 3. 行文中不得出现真实人名、校名或地名； 4. 词数 80 左右。（短文的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数） something about her something we can learn:face difficulties, … from a poor family Liang Ling, a 14-year-old girl, is a student in Class 1, Grade 9. She comes from… ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________________________________ She is great. Let’s wish her a better future. 2017 年海南中考作文与近几年相比，在考试形式上没有什么特殊的变化，文体都为议论文，根据题目 提供的信息，介绍梁玲。话题仍贴近学生的实际生活，让学生有话可说。体现了 2017 海南中考英语作文注 重学生的道德素养，鼓励学生全面发展的人文主义价值观，描写人物类的作文时中考常考的作文话题之一。 所以本文的难度一般，学生在写作时要注意围绕文章主题，介绍梁玲的情况，可以适当发挥。 Liang Ling，a 14-year-old girl，is a student in Class 1，Grade 9．She comes from a poor family．Since she was a little girl，she has cared for her family．Every day Liang Ling helps with the cooking，cleaning and washing. I asked her whether she was tired of doing so much housework．"Not really．"She smiled．"I've got used to it．"Though she is busy，she studies hard and gets good grades．What's more，she is always ready to help others．Everyone likes her because of her kindness．In our eyes，she always faces difficulties bravely．No matter how hard the life is，she never gives up． She is great．Let's wish her a better future． 【名师点评】 本篇写作需注意要求中所提供的要点介绍梁玲同学，“她家境贫寒，但她勇于面对困难、主动承担 家 务且刻苦学习”。另外要根据所给的英文提示展开描述，介绍梁玲基本信息（something about her）,我 们从她身上学到的优点（something we can learn:face difficulties），写作中注意不可遗漏，语义通顺，需用 到在平时积累相关的词汇，符合逻辑关系．上下文之间可以适当使用连接词．如 but，so，then 等．介绍人 物的现状用一般现在时，过去的事情用一般过去时，未来的情况用一般将来时。避免人称错误：自我介绍 时应使用第一人称，他人介绍时可用 she， he 或者 they 等。 避免句式单一：避免每个句子以 I 开头，或者 同样的主语。句子间或段落间应注意使用相应的连接词。 【写作亮点】 本文是一篇优秀的作文 。开头点明主题“She comes from a poor family．Since she was a little girl， she has cared for her family．她来自一个贫穷的家庭从小就照顾她的家人。” 正文部分详细介绍梁玲短 文用了一些短语和句式，如：I asked her whether she was tired of doing so much housework．我问她是否厌倦 了做这么多家务活． 这是一个 whether 引导的宾语从句，是否． 【高分句型一】I asked her whether she was tired of doing so much housework．我问她是否厌倦了做这么多家 务活． 这是一个 whether 引导的宾语从句。【 高分句型二】Though she is busy，she studies hard and gets good grades．虽然她很忙，但她努力学习并取得好成绩。本句为让步状语从句，注意 though，虽然，后面不能和 but 连用．